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Innocent Mischiefby Jo

Discarded cullet,
Mischief-making;
Playful sunbeams’
Rainbows lead a
myriad faery lights
in dance bewitched,
seducing shadows.
Pretty pity then
The sun scorched out
where, left amid the
charred and scarred,
crystal lays in wait –
new sun, new game..



I found the prompt quite difficult to use, so took some song lyrics and a news item as further inspiration for this piece of flash fiction. I'd appreciate knowing if you can empathise with either the protagonist or the victim, or neither !

Even a single ember can start a forest fire. - (original prompt)     by Liz


Even a single ember can start a forest fire.


I guess at last, you will begin to know just how it feels, to be the person who  has stopped me, blocked my way, hinderered me , provided  obstacles, even if you claim you didn't mean to do it. You won't be able to keep it up though. I'll make sure of that.
Recently I've heard  your whines , so you may as well save your breath. I've told you, I've heard it all before. And don't consider giving me another lecture. I think you have a nerve to criticise my conduct.  You think you're the one with the power, but little do you know it's me who has the real strength now. I can go when I want. I can go where I want. You dont mean anything to me now. That day you  secretly shuffled in through the back door, you thought I hadn't heard. You make me laugh. You're a fake. You're worthless - it's you who's deaf.
The spark of hatred smouldered and was fanned and flared with each new affair. I don't know anyone who'll miss you when the flame invades your letterbox. You didn't think, when your latest love was just an ember, what a forest fire you'd started.











The Last Straw



'It's no use, I can't get her to stand. You'll have to call the vet.'
'Well you know how much that'll cost. We know it's laminitis. Can't you just …'
The words got stuck in his mouth, but  I knew what he meant.- we can't afford to spend any more on this horse-

I looked at Gypsy, my gentle, black and white cob, lying there looking miserable. I knew it was my fault. This was the last straw. I knelt down on the shavings and rubbed her nose. The farrier had told me that she was too fat...the grass was too rich...but I kept thinking that like me, she just loved her food and it would be all right. Putting my hand to my aching back, I creaked and groaned as I heaved myself up from the stable floor. There were two of us who needed a bit of help.

'Just ring the vet. I'll do the rest.' I sobbed

The vet came within thirty minutes and confirmed our fears. He administered some pain relief and started to explain how the weight had caused the laminae in her hoof to become inflamed and extremely painful. My resolve hardened.
'If I get her to lose a significant amount of weight, will it go?' I asked.
'She'll always be susceptible, but you've caught it in time, so there's no reason why it shouldn't be controllable. Your farrier should be able to help with sympathetic shoeing.' he added, packing away his syringes and potions.

That night I drafted out a new paddock plan; a series of small enclosures that could be used in rotation to avoid boredom, whilst keeping down the quantity of grass available. On the kitchen cork-board, I posted two charts, one showing Gypsy's girth measurement and one showing my weight! I felt a determination for both us that had never been there before.

Next I needed straw- oat straw in particular. I  rang round some  merchants. The first three said they didn't have any small bales of anything, let alone  straw. I wanted oat straw because it was so much softer to eat and didn't have the sharp haulms that barley straw had. If she was going to have to go on a weight loss programme, at least she'd have something that was tasty...the odd little oat grain treat would help the overall plan, I was sure of that. At last I found a local farmer who had  some bales of good quality, feeding oat straw. Not only that, but it was near enough for me to collect in the trailer.

I arrived back next day with fifty bales of sweet smelling, golden bales, four tubs of plain yoghurt,
a pack of smoked salmon offcuts and a selection of fruits and salads; we were going to go through this together!

The first few weeks were strained and uncomfortable for all of us. Tempers were frayed, napping and kicking were not unknown and Gypsy was pretty hungry as well. Gradually though, routine took over and everyone started to get used to the new regime. Treats were appreciated more than ever, whether it was a raw carrot or a chocolate muffin...and the fat fell away , not by magic but by determination and the knowledge that we were both feeling and looking healthier than either of us had done for years.

That was eighteen months ago. The farrier complemented us on doing such a good job of getting Gypsy's weight down. Me?...I've dropped two dress sizes. It's true what they say...it's so much easier when you share the pain!

I find pictures really useful to start a story. This one was posted on a Dublin based website, www.creativewritingink.co.uk. They publish a weekly photo prompt. Would welcome any comments on the story. Thanks. Liz.